Some grammatical and wording errors detract rom reading

Essay
by Vishal Raval

Thank you f or your submission.

Rebekah Taylor.

Comment 2
approximately

This is a good introduction, however, because of some of the extra inf ormation supplied, you do need to provide in text ref erencing.

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Comment 4
Holistic and compassionate approaches to care by:
• Assisting individuals to attain or maintain their optimum state of wellness
• Respecting clients as culturally diverse individuals within communities, groups and f amilies• Recognizing health as a dynamic state ref lecting integration of mind, body and spirit• Ref lecting the characteristics of honesty, integrity, and personal responsibility
• Embracing the community that serves us as we learn to serve them
Excellence in education by:
• Utilizing dynamic learning environments
• Being responsive to changes in healthcare
• Supporting student centered and practice based education
• Promoting lif e long learning and advanced education
• Encouraging interaction, exploration, and collaborative learning
• Incorporating evidenced based practice in multiple venues

I'm thinking that you have set yourself a huge task here by not choosing just ONE aspect of nursing f or your perf ormance improvement project. You could have provided statistics here which would have been comparable when discussing perf ormance indicators such as benchmarking.

af ter the data is collected

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Strikethrough.

Awkward:
The expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 15
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to

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Comment 20
decision-making

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Comment 22
strictly

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Comment 24
What style of leadership are you discussing here? What are the qualities of the leader that will enable him/her to be able to accomplish this? You need to incorporate some of the theoretical components of this module here.

Comment 26
f inancial

Comment 27
This needs f urther explanation.

Comment 29
Again, what style of leadership are you discussing here? Specif ically what qualities does the leader need to have to enable this? Specif ically, HOW would the leader do it?

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Cite as a chapter in an edited text.